Dinner was done and Holly was stuck in the kitchen doing dishes when she heard a loud bang that shook the kitchen."What was that!" Holly yelled out to no one in particular, no one answered her question so she went to go find out herself. The loud noises sounded like they were coming from the basement. She slowly walked to the door and reached for the knob turning it ever so slowly. When the door was open wide enough for her to fit she quickly ran down the steps as yet another loud bang rang out. As she got closer, she found there was nothing there, the only weird thing was a strangely small door in the far right of the room."Wonder where that goes?" she pondered. Holly started walking towards the door, her heart was pounding faster and faster with each step she took then her heart stopped. She swore that the knob was moving slowly to the right and the door was creaking as it opened up. Holly bent down to the doors level to see what was opening it up but all she saw was a tiny hallway that lead to another door. Curious she started to crawl through the small opening of the door and down the hallway. The walls felt like they were moving all around her making her feel like she was in a never ending tunnel, but this tunnels end was another door, this one a bit bigger in size making it possible for Holly to now stand.She reached over and slowly opened the strange door, a bit nervous to find out what was on the other side of it.
Holly looked through the open door to see a forest.The forest was beautiful, it had many different trees and brids flying around and the sky was a bright blue with few clouds in it. Entering the forest holly saw a trail and started to walk. She was so distracted by all the nature surrounding her, she didn't realize that she was being followed.
A black wolf was stalking Holly following close behind with every move she made.When Holly turned around she let out a blood curdling scream and started to run. The wolf started to run after her chasing her through the forest.Not noticing what was in front of her, she tripped over a log causing her ankle to twist. She screamed out in pain as she tried to get up, but it was to late, the wolf was already right beside her."Please don't eat me!" Holly cried out to the black wolf that was cowering in front of her. Surprisingly the wolf replyed "silly girl I'm not going to eat you" relieved and also a bit shocked that the wolf replied Holly let out a sigh and asked if the wolf was lying, the wolf laughed then said "of course I'm lying" and lunged at Holly riping her apart.
Holly woke up realizing that she hadn't been killed and that it was just a nightmare and that she was safe lying in her bed. Just as she was about to go to sleep she looked up and saw the same wolf. The wolf pounced at Holly ripping her apart but this time it wasn't just a dream.
Wow! Thanks Jayde. I love the beginning where you build tension by not letting the character through the door right away. I also like the ending but feel like you maybe wanted the story to be over? You had started to create intrigue for me and suddenly it was over. Great first write. Remember that every time someone new talks (or thinks) you need to start a new paragraph. :)
ReplyDeleteI love your story plot. But you used an exclamation mark instead of a question mark. Other than that I love your story.
ReplyDeleteGood story, I liked the starting. The last paragraph should have been more detailed rather that just ending it with a few sentences.
ReplyDeleteWell that was a really different story then the usual ones. I like the way that you made the reader get interested. Good job Jayde
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